Add docs/review-notes.md: consolidated review checklist

Compiles the wordplay/puns, coined & provisional terms, gender guesses, and
register/length flags scattered across PLAN.md batch notes and the glossary
into one checklist for the Slovak-speaking human review pass.

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# Review notes — things to check in the Slovak human review pass
Consolidated list of wordplay, coined terms, gender guesses, and register calls
that the machine-assisted first pass flagged. Work through these with a
Slovak-speaking eye. Grouped by type; `idx` = position in the flat `<entry>`
list where useful. See [`glossary.md`](glossary.md) and [`../PLAN.md`](../PLAN.md)
for the locked terms and per-batch context.
---
## 1. Puns & wordplay (hardest to get right)
| Where | English | Current SK | Note |
|---|---|---|---|
| Gabbro, satellite (idx ~460466) | "Ol' Spacey" (the deep-space satellite; "Ol'" = affectionate "old") | **Vesmírko** | Nickname folded to a diminutive that carries affection via form, not oldness. Line 465 ("'Ol'' is more a term of affection") therefore explains *starký/old* while the name is *Vesmírko* — mild disconnect. Consider a nickname that keeps the "old" beat, e.g. *Starký* / *Vesmírko starký*. |
| Gabbro (idx 1353) | "you just got **Feldsparred**" | *...práve ťa **Feldsparovalo*** | Invented verb from a name; keep or rework. |
| Gabbro (idx 399 etc.) | "**Statue Island** ...Get it?" (it's the *island* with the *statue*) | **Ostrov sôch** ...Chápeš? | The "get it?" gag barely lands in SK since the wordplay is thin even in EN. OK, but confirm. |
| Chert (idx 1979) | "Keep **an eye or four** on the stars" (Hearthians have >2 eyes) | *Maj oči — **pokojne aj štyri** — na hviezdach* | Multi-eye joke; check it reads naturally. |
| Player self (idx 252) | "we are the **Feldspar** of weird time stuff" | *sme **Feldsparom** čudných časových vecí* | Idiom "the X of Y"; fine but review. |
| Ghost-matter kid (idx 1702) | "All **pew pew pew**!" | *Také **pyu pyu pyu**!* | Onomatopoeia choice. |
| Feldspar note (idx 1350) | "Hornfels, **ya burnt marshmallow**" (insult) | *Hornfels, ty **pripálený marshmallow*** | Insult + the kept loanword *marshmallow* (see §2). |
| Porphy, sap wine (idx 1478, 1490) | "**The Good Stuff**"; bottles labeled "structural collapse" / "house fire" | *To Pravé*; „zrútenie konštrukcie" / „požiar domu" | Bar/booze humor; confirm tone. |
| Chert (idx 1994) | "On a **scale of one to dead**, I'd give it a seven or eight" | *Na škále **od jeden po smrť**...* | Keep the deadpan. |
| Feldspar jellyfish journal (idx 2181) | "Boring crashes: 0 (a personal best!)" / "entry #... 'not 1'" | translated literally | Feldspar's swagger; check voice. |
| Fishing rhymes (idx 1540, 1567, 1576) | fishing rhyme/song/tune couplets (the 3rd deliberately fails to rhyme) | rendered **loosely to keep a rhyme** | 1567 rhymes *pesnička/celička*; 1576 intentionally drops the rhyme (matches the EN joke). Review for taste. |
| Nomai, Pye/Ramie (batch 56) | "gas / aeriform" state-of-matter puns; Pye's supernova/"gas" humor | flagged in batch notes | Physics/gas double meaning — verify it survives. |
| Nomai, Conoy (batch 6) | "lose his head" joke | flagged | Idiom. |
| Nomai, Melorae (batch 7) | "my **sedimentary** friend" (geologist pun) | flagged | Rock pun on "sedentary". |
| Nomai idiom (glossary) | "on the other **appendage**" (hand-joke; Nomai have appendages) | **Na druhej končatine** | Locked, but re-read in context. |
| Idaea (batch 11) | Sun Station "mission" humor | flagged | Deadpan Nomai humor. |
**Character names are themselves geology/rock puns** (Slate, Feldspar, Gabbro,
Chert, Gneiss, Tuff, Tephra, Porphy, Arkose, Mica, Moraine, Hornfels, …) — kept
in English by design (see glossary §1). No action unless we ever localize names.
---
## 2. Coined / provisional terms (no prior canon — confirm rendering)
| English | Current SK | Status |
|---|---|---|
| Ol' Spacey | **Vesmírko** | provisional (see §1) |
| Statue Island (Gabbro's coinage) | **Ostrov sôch** | provisional |
| Lunar Outpost (Esker's, on the Attlerock) | **Mesačná základňa** | provisional |
| Youngbark Crater | **Kráter Mladej kôry** | provisional (blockC) |
| Quantum Grove Crater | **Kráter Kvantového hája** | provisional (blockC) |
| The Good Stuff (sap wine) | **To Pravé** | provisional |
| marshmallow | **marshmallow** (kept) | decide: keep loanword or *sladká pena*? Be consistent. |
| Twilight Twin (Nomai warp-tower lines) | **Súmračné dvojča** | ❓ unusual term — confirm meaning/rendering |
| Echoes of the Eye (DLC title) | **Ozveny Oka** in prose | ❓ keep EN on store/menu title strings? |
| Distant Nomai places (batch 10) | **Súmračná galaxia**, **Čierna skala**, **Jasná iskra** | flagged |
---
## 3. Gender guesses to verify against the game
Outer Wilds uses **they/them for all Hearthians**, so gender is textually
unspecified. Slovak past tense forces a gender, so the first pass **defaulted to
masculine** for everyone not otherwise cued. Verify in-game whether any of these
are canonically female (would flip verbs/adjectives):
- **Village kids & villagers:** Marl, Tephra, Galena, Rutile, Tuff, Spinel,
Arkose, Gneiss, Porphy, Mica, Moraine, Tektite.
- **Travelers:** Gabbro, Riebeck, Feldspar, Chert, Esker — all **masculine** by
the glossary default.
- **Ground crew:** Hornfels, Hal, Gossan, Slate — **masculine** (Hornfels & Hal
confirmed masculine in existing SK).
- **Locked female (from EN pronoun cues):** Solanum, Poke, Clary, Ramie, Pye,
Filix, Melorae, Privet. **Locked male:** Annona, Coleus, Avens, Plume, Idaea.
If the community/game establishes a canonical gender for any Hearthian, update
the glossary §5b table and re-pass that speaker's lines.
---
## 4. Register & length
- **Nomai text walls** — keep the formal, precise, courteous voice; watch length
vs. the in-game panels (utility supports variable length, but very long walls
should stay tight).
- **Chert's panic stammer** (idx 20292031, 20762077) — rendered as
*a-a-ale / d-d-dúfam / m-možno*. Check it reads as anxious, not broken.
- **Kids' register** — playful, casual *ty*; player often *mláďa*. Make sure the
kid voices don't sound adult.
- **Player self-talk** (the "two of you" convo, idx 169308) — both speakers are
the player, masculine, mutual *ty*; screams left verbatim.
---
## 5. Left verbatim on purpose (not for translation)
Panic-scream onomatopoeia (idx 174, 267286), sick-noises (*Hurgh…*, idx
1666/1685), shy-kid silences (`…`), Kickstarter backer credit **names** (idx
24082415), and the ASCII-art easter eggs (idx 24162418, only embedded words
like LOADING → *NAČÍTAVA SA* were translated). Leave these as-is.