Jaroslav Beneš
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- Reword per review: "an eye or four" -> Maj oko, aj štyri; fishing rhyme 1567 -> ...návnadička (keeps rhyme + "bait is wrong"). - Gender: cross-checked every gendered self-reference against shippy/ outer-wilds-czech. Only 3 disagreements file-wide -> Arkose (feminine), Porphy (feminine), and the hide-and-seek kid at 1627 (feminine) corrected; Filix kept feminine (EN "her note" beats Czech's masculine). All other Hearthians confirmed masculine. - Definitive leak detection: quote-normalized suffix-of-key test caught 12 more untranslated values the heuristics missed (curly/straight-quote drift) - duplicate Eye-shrine walls (1167-1170), Nomai locator, traveler arrival, hide-and-seek + ghost-matter kid lines. Now 0 English leaks in the flat list. - Consistency: "The Good Stuff" standardized to Tá Dobrota. - glossary.md + review-notes.md updated with the gender findings. Build OK. Co-Authored-By: Claude Opus 4.8 (1M context) <noreply@anthropic.com>
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Review notes — things to check in the Slovak human review pass
Consolidated list of wordplay, coined terms, gender guesses, and register calls
that the machine-assisted first pass flagged. Work through these with a
Slovak-speaking eye. Grouped by type; idx = position in the flat <entry>
list where useful. See glossary.md and ../PLAN.md
for the locked terms and per-batch context.
1. Puns & wordplay (hardest to get right)
| Where | English | Current SK | Note |
|---|---|---|---|
| Gabbro, satellite (idx ~460–466) | "Ol' Spacey" (the deep-space satellite; "Ol'" = affectionate "old") | Vesmírko | Nickname folded to a diminutive that carries affection via form, not oldness. Line 465 ("'Ol'' is more a term of affection") therefore explains starký/old while the name is Vesmírko — mild disconnect. Consider a nickname that keeps the "old" beat, e.g. Starký / Vesmírko starký. |
| Gabbro (idx 1353) | "you just got Feldsparred" | ...práve ťa Feldsparovalo | Invented verb from a name; keep or rework. |
| Gabbro (idx 399 etc.) | "Statue Island ...Get it?" (it's the island with the statue) | Ostrov sôch ...Chápeš? | The "get it?" gag barely lands in SK since the wordplay is thin even in EN. OK, but confirm. |
| Chert (idx 1979) | "Keep an eye or four on the stars" (Hearthians have >2 eyes) | Maj oko, aj štyri, na hviezdach | ✅ reworded per review (was Maj oči — pokojne aj štyri —). |
| Player self (idx 252) | "we are the Feldspar of weird time stuff" | sme Feldsparom čudných časových vecí | Idiom "the X of Y"; fine but review. |
| Ghost-matter kid (idx 1702) | "All pew pew pew!" | Také pyu pyu pyu! | Onomatopoeia choice. |
| Feldspar note (idx 1350) | "Hornfels, ya burnt marshmallow" (insult) | Hornfels, ty pripálený marshmallow | Insult + the kept loanword marshmallow (see §2). |
| Porphy, sap wine (idx 1476, 1478, 1490) | "The Good Stuff"; bottles labeled "structural collapse" / "house fire" | Tá Dobrota (standardized; was mixed To Pravé/Tá Dobrota); „zrútenie konštrukcie" / „požiar domu" | Bar/booze humor; Porphy is feminine (§3). |
| Chert (idx 1994) | "On a scale of one to dead, I'd give it a seven or eight" | Na škále od jeden po smrť... | Keep the deadpan. |
| Feldspar jellyfish journal (idx 2181) | "Boring crashes: 0 (a personal best!)" / "entry #... 'not 1'" | translated literally | Feldspar's swagger; check voice. |
| Fishing rhymes (idx 1540, 1567, 1576) | fishing rhyme/song/tune couplets (the 3rd deliberately fails to rhyme) | rendered loosely to keep a rhyme | ✅ 1567 reworked to …ech, asi mi nesedí táto návnadička (rhymes pesnička/návnadička, keeps "bait is wrong"). 1576 intentionally drops the rhyme (matches the EN joke). |
| Nomai, Pye/Ramie (batch 5–6) | "gas / aeriform" state-of-matter puns; Pye's supernova/"gas" humor | flagged in batch notes | Physics/gas double meaning — verify it survives. |
| Nomai, Conoy (batch 6) | "lose his head" joke | flagged | Idiom. |
| Nomai, Melorae (batch 7) | "my sedimentary friend" (geologist pun) | flagged | Rock pun on "sedentary". |
| Nomai idiom (glossary) | "on the other appendage" (hand-joke; Nomai have appendages) | Na druhej končatine | Locked, but re-read in context. |
| Idaea (batch 11) | Sun Station "mission" humor | flagged | Deadpan Nomai humor. |
Character names are themselves geology/rock puns (Slate, Feldspar, Gabbro, Chert, Gneiss, Tuff, Tephra, Porphy, Arkose, Mica, Moraine, Hornfels, …) — kept in English by design (see glossary §1). No action unless we ever localize names.
2. Coined / provisional terms (no prior canon — confirm rendering)
| English | Current SK | Status |
|---|---|---|
| Ol' Spacey | Vesmírko | provisional (see §1) |
| Statue Island (Gabbro's coinage) | Ostrov sôch | provisional |
| Lunar Outpost (Esker's, on the Attlerock) | Mesačná základňa | provisional |
| Youngbark Crater | Kráter Mladej kôry | provisional (blockC) |
| Quantum Grove Crater | Kráter Kvantového hája | provisional (blockC) |
| The Good Stuff (sap wine) | Tá Dobrota | standardized this pass |
| marshmallow | marshmallow (kept) | decide: keep loanword or sladká pena? Be consistent. |
| Twilight Twin (Nomai warp-tower lines) | Súmračné dvojča | ❓ unusual term — confirm meaning/rendering |
| Echoes of the Eye (DLC title) | Ozveny Oka in prose | ❓ keep EN on store/menu title strings? |
| Distant Nomai places (batch 10) | Súmračná galaxia, Čierna skala, Jasná iskra | flagged |
3. Gender — cross-checked against the Czech mod ✅
Outer Wilds uses they/them for all Hearthians; Slovak forces a gender, so the
first pass defaulted masculine. We then cross-checked every gendered
self-reference against shippy/outer-wilds-czech (Czech is also grammatically
gendered) — only 3 disagreements surfaced across the whole file, now resolved:
- Arkose (ghost-matter kid) → corrected to feminine (Slyšela jsem).
- Porphy (sap-wine maker) → corrected to feminine (dolila dávku).
- Filix — Czech has her masculine, but English says "her note", so she stays feminine (English canon wins).
- Also flipped the hide-and-seek kid at idx 1627 to feminine (Chtěla jsem… otravná).
Confirmed masculine (Czech agrees): Chert, Esker, Gabbro, Riebeck, Feldspar, Gneiss, Marl, Mica, Spinel, Tektite, Tuff, Hornfels, Hal, Gossan, Slate. Undetermined (no gendered self-reference either side; left masculine): Galena, Rutile, Tephra, Moraine — worth a glance in-game but low-risk. Locked female (EN cues): Solanum, Poke, Clary, Ramie, Pye, Filix, Melorae, Privet. Locked male: Annona, Coleus, Avens, Plume, Idaea.
4. Register & length
- Nomai text walls — keep the formal, precise, courteous voice; watch length vs. the in-game panels (utility supports variable length, but very long walls should stay tight).
- Chert's panic stammer (idx 2029–2031, 2076–2077) — rendered as a-a-ale / d-d-dúfam / m-možno. Check it reads as anxious, not broken.
- Kids' register — playful, casual ty; player often mláďa. Make sure the kid voices don't sound adult.
- Player self-talk (the "two of you" convo, idx 169–308) — both speakers are the player, masculine, mutual ty; screams left verbatim.
5. Left verbatim on purpose (not for translation)
Panic-scream onomatopoeia (idx 174, 267–286), sick-noises (Hurgh…, idx
1666/1685), shy-kid silences (…), Kickstarter backer credit names (idx
2408–2415), and the ASCII-art easter eggs (idx 2416–2418, only embedded words
like LOADING → NAČÍTAVA SA were translated). Leave these as-is.