Jaroslav Beneš
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- Reword per review: "an eye or four" -> Maj oko, aj štyri; fishing rhyme 1567 -> ...návnadička (keeps rhyme + "bait is wrong"). - Gender: cross-checked every gendered self-reference against shippy/ outer-wilds-czech. Only 3 disagreements file-wide -> Arkose (feminine), Porphy (feminine), and the hide-and-seek kid at 1627 (feminine) corrected; Filix kept feminine (EN "her note" beats Czech's masculine). All other Hearthians confirmed masculine. - Definitive leak detection: quote-normalized suffix-of-key test caught 12 more untranslated values the heuristics missed (curly/straight-quote drift) - duplicate Eye-shrine walls (1167-1170), Nomai locator, traveler arrival, hide-and-seek + ghost-matter kid lines. Now 0 English leaks in the flat list. - Consistency: "The Good Stuff" standardized to Tá Dobrota. - glossary.md + review-notes.md updated with the gender findings. Build OK. Co-Authored-By: Claude Opus 4.8 (1M context) <noreply@anthropic.com>
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# Review notes — things to check in the Slovak human review pass
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Consolidated list of wordplay, coined terms, gender guesses, and register calls
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that the machine-assisted first pass flagged. Work through these with a
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Slovak-speaking eye. Grouped by type; `idx` = position in the flat `<entry>`
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list where useful. See [`glossary.md`](glossary.md) and [`../PLAN.md`](../PLAN.md)
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for the locked terms and per-batch context.
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---
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## 1. Puns & wordplay (hardest to get right)
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| Where | English | Current SK | Note |
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| Gabbro, satellite (idx ~460–466) | "Ol' Spacey" (the deep-space satellite; "Ol'" = affectionate "old") | **Vesmírko** | Nickname folded to a diminutive that carries affection via form, not oldness. Line 465 ("'Ol'' is more a term of affection") therefore explains *starký/old* while the name is *Vesmírko* — mild disconnect. Consider a nickname that keeps the "old" beat, e.g. *Starký* / *Vesmírko starký*. |
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| Gabbro (idx 1353) | "you just got **Feldsparred**" | *...práve ťa **Feldsparovalo*** | Invented verb from a name; keep or rework. |
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| Gabbro (idx 399 etc.) | "**Statue Island** ...Get it?" (it's the *island* with the *statue*) | **Ostrov sôch** ...Chápeš? | The "get it?" gag barely lands in SK since the wordplay is thin even in EN. OK, but confirm. |
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| Chert (idx 1979) | "Keep **an eye or four** on the stars" (Hearthians have >2 eyes) | *Maj oko, aj štyri, na hviezdach* | ✅ reworded per review (was *Maj oči — pokojne aj štyri —*). |
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| Player self (idx 252) | "we are the **Feldspar** of weird time stuff" | *sme **Feldsparom** čudných časových vecí* | Idiom "the X of Y"; fine but review. |
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| Ghost-matter kid (idx 1702) | "All **pew pew pew**!" | *Také **pyu pyu pyu**!* | Onomatopoeia choice. |
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| Feldspar note (idx 1350) | "Hornfels, **ya burnt marshmallow**" (insult) | *Hornfels, ty **pripálený marshmallow*** | Insult + the kept loanword *marshmallow* (see §2). |
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| Porphy, sap wine (idx 1476, 1478, 1490) | "**The Good Stuff**"; bottles labeled "structural collapse" / "house fire" | **Tá Dobrota** (standardized; was mixed *To Pravé*/*Tá Dobrota*); „zrútenie konštrukcie" / „požiar domu" | Bar/booze humor; Porphy is **feminine** (§3). |
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| Chert (idx 1994) | "On a **scale of one to dead**, I'd give it a seven or eight" | *Na škále **od jeden po smrť**...* | Keep the deadpan. |
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| Feldspar jellyfish journal (idx 2181) | "Boring crashes: 0 (a personal best!)" / "entry #... 'not 1'" | translated literally | Feldspar's swagger; check voice. |
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| Fishing rhymes (idx 1540, 1567, 1576) | fishing rhyme/song/tune couplets (the 3rd deliberately fails to rhyme) | rendered **loosely to keep a rhyme** | ✅ 1567 reworked to *…ech, asi mi nesedí táto **návnadička*** (rhymes *pesnička/návnadička*, keeps "bait is wrong"). 1576 intentionally drops the rhyme (matches the EN joke). |
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| Nomai, Pye/Ramie (batch 5–6) | "gas / aeriform" state-of-matter puns; Pye's supernova/"gas" humor | flagged in batch notes | Physics/gas double meaning — verify it survives. |
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| Nomai, Conoy (batch 6) | "lose his head" joke | flagged | Idiom. |
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| Nomai, Melorae (batch 7) | "my **sedimentary** friend" (geologist pun) | flagged | Rock pun on "sedentary". |
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| Nomai idiom (glossary) | "on the other **appendage**" (hand-joke; Nomai have appendages) | **Na druhej končatine** | Locked, but re-read in context. |
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| Idaea (batch 11) | Sun Station "mission" humor | flagged | Deadpan Nomai humor. |
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**Character names are themselves geology/rock puns** (Slate, Feldspar, Gabbro,
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Chert, Gneiss, Tuff, Tephra, Porphy, Arkose, Mica, Moraine, Hornfels, …) — kept
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in English by design (see glossary §1). No action unless we ever localize names.
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## 2. Coined / provisional terms (no prior canon — confirm rendering)
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| English | Current SK | Status |
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| Ol' Spacey | **Vesmírko** | provisional (see §1) |
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| Statue Island (Gabbro's coinage) | **Ostrov sôch** | provisional |
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| Lunar Outpost (Esker's, on the Attlerock) | **Mesačná základňa** | provisional |
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| Youngbark Crater | **Kráter Mladej kôry** | provisional (blockC) |
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| Quantum Grove Crater | **Kráter Kvantového hája** | provisional (blockC) |
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| The Good Stuff (sap wine) | **Tá Dobrota** | standardized this pass |
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| marshmallow | **marshmallow** (kept) | decide: keep loanword or *sladká pena*? Be consistent. |
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| Twilight Twin (Nomai warp-tower lines) | **Súmračné dvojča** | ❓ unusual term — confirm meaning/rendering |
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| Echoes of the Eye (DLC title) | **Ozveny Oka** in prose | ❓ keep EN on store/menu title strings? |
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| Distant Nomai places (batch 10) | **Súmračná galaxia**, **Čierna skala**, **Jasná iskra** | flagged |
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## 3. Gender — cross-checked against the Czech mod ✅
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Outer Wilds uses **they/them for all Hearthians**; Slovak forces a gender, so the
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first pass **defaulted masculine**. We then cross-checked every gendered
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self-reference against `shippy/outer-wilds-czech` (Czech is also grammatically
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gendered) — only **3** disagreements surfaced across the whole file, now resolved:
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- **Arkose** (ghost-matter kid) → **corrected to feminine** (*Slyšela jsem*).
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- **Porphy** (sap-wine maker) → **corrected to feminine** (*dolila dávku*).
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- **Filix** — Czech has her masculine, but English says *"her note"*, so she
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**stays feminine** (English canon wins).
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- Also flipped the **hide-and-seek kid** at idx 1627 to feminine (*Chtěla
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jsem… otravná*).
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**Confirmed masculine** (Czech agrees): Chert, Esker, Gabbro, Riebeck, Feldspar,
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Gneiss, Marl, Mica, Spinel, Tektite, Tuff, Hornfels, Hal, Gossan, Slate.
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**Undetermined** (no gendered self-reference either side; left masculine): Galena,
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Rutile, Tephra, Moraine — worth a glance in-game but low-risk.
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**Locked female (EN cues):** Solanum, Poke, Clary, Ramie, Pye, Filix, Melorae,
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Privet. **Locked male:** Annona, Coleus, Avens, Plume, Idaea.
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## 4. Register & length
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- **Nomai text walls** — keep the formal, precise, courteous voice; watch length
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vs. the in-game panels (utility supports variable length, but very long walls
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should stay tight).
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- **Chert's panic stammer** (idx 2029–2031, 2076–2077) — rendered as
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*a-a-ale / d-d-dúfam / m-možno*. Check it reads as anxious, not broken.
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- **Kids' register** — playful, casual *ty*; player often *mláďa*. Make sure the
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kid voices don't sound adult.
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- **Player self-talk** (the "two of you" convo, idx 169–308) — both speakers are
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the player, masculine, mutual *ty*; screams left verbatim.
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## 5. Left verbatim on purpose (not for translation)
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Panic-scream onomatopoeia (idx 174, 267–286), sick-noises (*Hurgh…*, idx
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1666/1685), shy-kid silences (`…`), Kickstarter backer credit **names** (idx
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2408–2415), and the ASCII-art easter eggs (idx 2416–2418, only embedded words
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like LOADING → *NAČÍTAVA SA* were translated). Leave these as-is.
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